查看完整版本: 【母子天伦】---大漠豪情

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最好有事件发展的经过，这才是有头有尾的好文。

肉戏不错,让人看得热血沸腾!可惜情节粗糙!

这篇文章与狂吻俄罗斯有关联吗？还是独立的自成一体的文章？
作者能透露一些写作计划吗？

好文,希望多点母子情感沟通,不要一上来就搞.

抓几只小虫子：
我知道她被我味的很饱，很满足了---味应为-喂
我到了树下，这棵书主干不高----书应为树
我情不自禁的保住她捉住她----保应为抱
一边不顾一切的将硕大浑圆的大屁股挺向我的大肉棒！-----挺应为迎
浑圆硕大的像浴盆一样的大屁股向我摇了摇。-----像应为象
着的肉棒所表现出的高昂站意时------站应为战
感谢楼主的辛苦努力。

魔鬼兄一贯的辣文风格啊！肉戏不错,情节粗糙!

好文章，希望鬼大能把它写成一篇同武林淫乱史一样的长篇的经典的文章！

捉虫如下：
1失去了动力(重心)，
2我[的]分(奋)身立刻挺起
3我也是再接再厉(励)
4打到母亲花芯(蕊)上甚至是子宫里时，
5龟头顺利的挤开母亲的花芯(蕊)，
6龟头顶到了母亲的花芯(蕊)，
7将一个较为孤立的小山峰都饱(包)含在内了！
8都流扫(骚)水了！真是淫妇！
9甚至是一鼓作气的插破花芯(蕊)
10龟头碾开了母亲的花芯(蕊)，

楼主的小说豪放热烈,读起来激情澎湃啊.感谢如此好文

希望楼主在情节上多下点功夫，H文部分太浓了。

谢谢 楼主 写得不错，就是他们的心理描写少了。

写得相当的好 已经收藏并准备花时间研究如何向楼主一样描写性爱过程 已经注册号了新帐号 可以发帖的时候就要分享我的作品了 再次感谢大大的分享

肉戏有点太多了,情节有点少，不过支持LZ。

最近很多文，像这个贴就是，如果不回复的话顶楼就是空的，没内容，但是又没看到必须回复的说明？

肉戏太多了也不好。最好是将肉戏融入情节中。
令期待老大及时更新。

描写的不错很让人冲动 嘿嘿不错的文章 希望更新快点

This is another typical novel talking about incest and adultery. Such a theme is quite popular in the adult novel world. I do not understand why there are so many writers want to write such a theme. One explaination is since this is a story, any one can write anything simply out of his imagination, no matter it is true and illusion. Perhaps the writer of this type of story wants to look for sex satisfaction which he never be able to experience in his own real life.

The story, starting from the very beginning up to the closing of the  paragraphs, carries only One thing, that is love making between mother and son. We cannot talk about plot and structure of this novel, because the plot is very simple: both mother and son love each other very much and both of them are drawned in the world of sex, day and night, night and day, no matter where they are, at home, on the tree or at the desert.

We cannot talk about the structure of the novel either. There are many paragraphs in this story. But as a matter of fact, these paragraphs can be combined in or or two paragraphs because the main ideas of each paragraphs are more or less the same, sex making. Even there is a setting taken place at the desert, the content is the same - the incest love mother and son.

We do not know how old the writer is and how rich his sex experience is. But from his descriptions of the sexual responses of the mother who screams so much during sex making But talks so much shows the writer does not have a full understanding of the sex response of a real woman's love making.

Love making is supposed to be something holy and enjoyable. One is to love and the other is to be loved. The romatic atmosphere is peaceful, enjoyable and comfortable. Then follows the building up of excitements of close physical contacts with the male's hoarse breathing and the female's screamings. Even they exchange words, all take place in choppy but low sounds. Even the female talks about her sex satisfaction, she will not keep on talking and talking. This is not real love making. This may happen perhaps when you are having sex with a prostitue who keeps on talking about sex satisfaction in order to drive early ejaculation of her customer so she can take an other business.

Of course, in such story of incest, we cannot expect to have the building up of romatic and enjoyable sex atmosphere. The story is aimed to create a roaing wild sex situation which will trap the readers to the sex imagination to the full span. But the description of the non stopping screaming and shouting and talking of the mother give us an impression that the mother is not enjoying her love making with her son - she loves her way of talking. In such way, the story reads a bit unreal to life.

Of course, we need to appreciate the writer's rich vocabularies used in describing the sex behavour of both sexes. The wild sex atmosphere is successfully created that we readers may be easily attracted to go into the same world as the writer, provided there are not too many paragraphs carrying more or less the same theme.

The language, which is very appropriately used in such a situation of incest love making, has made this novel a good success becuase using foul language is very common in love making, even in the most intelligent classes.

这对母子太强悍了，竟然可以想着法子到处嘿咻。

太不真实，缺乏心理的描写，过于注重肉体。